Here are some more of the poems that we wrote on Friday:
Rainbow
Eyes are crystal blue
As clear as the sea
Staring constantly at the city
Rainbow’s fur is as soft as a pillow
multicoloured skin gleaming like stars
Twinkling in the sky
Wings waving to prepare for
Going up into the air
As white as snow
She flies through the misty storm
Cream, twisted blade
Lies pointed on her head
As sharp as a sword
by Kacey
Blaze!!
Eyes like molten rock
burning away
in the darkness
He stares angrily
at his heap of treasure
Teeth as big as a tree
And sharp as daggers.
by Kaden
Oscar the Ogre
Big brown friendly eyes
that glow at night
Eyes that try to make a friend
Teeth so yellow and smooth
Woodlice making nests in his mouth
treating it like their home
Skin as green as bogeys
coming out of your nose
Feet so hairy
Like tarantuala’s skin
Clothes
like dirty rags dragging themselves
on the ground
Ears full of ear wax,
bugs and creatures.
A friendly ogre
That no one has ever seen or heard of.
by Rachel
Zadderyouth
Teeth as sharp as daggers
Pointing inside his jaw
About to strike
He grins meanly showing
every little dagger.
Eyes, a fiery red
like new dripping wet blood
Stare in the dull darkness
At the massive
pile of vast shiny gold.
Claws point like knives
that have just been sharpened
Wings flapping lazily
as big as an aeroplane
He glares down to see his prey
His skin is scaly black
to camouflage
himself in the darkness
by Holly
Bella the Unicorn
Sky blue eyes that
look like glittering stars in the morning
daylight, watching the
beautiful land
Searching for someone
to make friends with
A sparkly sword as blunt as a pencil
sticking up on her head
like an upside down
ice cream cone
Her skin is a white blanket
so soft and silky that
your fingers slide off!
A face so friendly
you immediately want to
make friends with her
by Hannah
The Amazing World of 5JdV 
Sep 17, 2012 @ 05:17:18
Hi Holly,
I am a girl in Grade 6 from New Gisborne Primary in Australia. I love the idea of poems, they are so cool! All these are fantastic but I especially liked yours. It forms a very clear picture in my mind. I was just wondering… Why did you choose the idea of a dragon? Did you get it from a book or do you just like dragons?
Hope to speak (or type :P) to you soon,
From Erin.H
Sep 18, 2012 @ 08:23:34
G.day Erin.H we are Taylor and Thomas we love the idea of dragons aswell but some
of us did unicorns and lizards and allsourts.I dont realy know were we got the idea of doing dragons the teacher just wanted to do poems and she chose to do dragons and mythical creatures.
Sep 19, 2012 @ 09:25:32
Hi Thomas and Taylor.
I really like the idea of doing poems, and doing them about mythical creatures must of been hard but fun to do. If I had a chance to do one of those poems, I would do one about a young female vampire. If you had a chance to re-do your poem, what would you do it on?
Hope to talk to you soon,
From Erin 🙂 =)
Sep 17, 2012 @ 10:39:20
Hi ,My nams Maria,
i liked that the rainbow has a lot of similes.
Sep 18, 2012 @ 08:16:10
Hi Maria my name Kacey. I hope you enjoned reading my poem and yes its has a lot of simeles. Thank you for commenting .
Sep 18, 2012 @ 20:46:54
Hi kacey,
My name is Mehvish,I am a girl which goes to Penn Wood primary school.I am 10 years old I also live in England.I really liked your poem because it has got some description but I think you should be using new combinations of words.I liked the bit when it says ‘eyes are crystal blue’ because it makes me feel how you wrote it.
Sep 24, 2012 @ 08:35:39
Hi mehvish its kacey thank you for replying to me . i really hope you enjoed my poem.
and i am 10 years old aswell amnd tured 10 yesterday .
talk to you soon
love kaceyxxx
Sep 17, 2012 @ 10:49:43
Hi Holly,
I am a girl who is in year 6 and I go to Penn Wood Primary School in England.
I like that you used a lot of description. You seemed to have worked very hard. It makes me think about alot such as you wrote wings flapping lazily, it made me think why he might be lazy.
Please reply A.S.A.P
Cydney Winter
Sep 17, 2012 @ 10:51:09
Hey Grade 6 Pupils
My name is Sophie and I go to Penn Wood School in England. I love these poems that you’ve created and there are so many to read.
How do you think of all these great ideas? I also loved the fun activities that you do during school I think they are clever and fun too.
This is a great blog and I hope that you visit ours aswell!
Make sure you comment back please! Good Day!(G,day)
Sep 24, 2012 @ 02:21:13
Dear Sophie.S,
I am Abbey from NGPS and I agree with you very much, I love the poems they were well thought out. This school does have very fun activities, what is your school like? Have you ever done anything like this before. My school has and we did it 2 years ago in grade 4 but ours were about differant colours I think I choos the colour purple or blue. What kind of things do you do in your spare time?
Please reply.
From Abbey.B NGPS!
Sep 17, 2012 @ 10:57:09
Hi! my name is Areeba and I really liked your poem, all that vocabulary you have used is amazing! it creates a picture of the dragon in my head, I just don’t know where you get these amazing wow words from. Hope to hearing from you soon.
Sep 18, 2012 @ 08:21:17
Thank you we thought the poem was ok and are glad you liked it
Sep 17, 2012 @ 10:59:12
I like the poem Rainbow because it is very freindly and kind. It makes nice images in my head. I really liked the sentence multicoloured skin gleaming like stars i think it was great!!
Sep 18, 2012 @ 08:21:16
hi khubaib im kacey thank you very much for commmenting. i really enjoyend you
liked my poem. i like when it when you get pictures of rainbows in your head.
Sep 17, 2012 @ 11:03:01
Hi, you have done a great job writng these poems. You have used good description and i like all your vocabulary. It’s cool! Have you got some of your ideas from a book or not? where did you get the idea of a dragon?
Hope to hear your reply!!
Sep 18, 2012 @ 05:20:12
HI Amrita, It`s Abbey from NGPS
your very right I love them to they are very thought out and I think there about magical creatures os something like that.
just wondering I am writing this at 3:15 at school on a Tuesday so what times would it be at your school. it`s nice to talk to you. I hope we can chat more.
please reply:)
Sep 18, 2012 @ 08:17:11
Hi Abbey
Thank you for liking our poems, we did put alot of thought into them.
It didn’t take long to make them I think we had two days.
First we did a poem as a whole class it was a dragon we named it Quorthyne.
Talk to you soon
Maya
Sep 21, 2012 @ 00:41:54
Hi again Maya, It is nice to talk to you again. I think it`s good that you were doing poems I remember now that in grade 4 we did poems, they were about colours I can`t really remember what colour I did I think it was blue, purple or green I know my friend Kyra did red hers was very good. You had to do some good things about the colour and some bad things. I hope to talk to you soon!! From your blogpal Abbey.B
Sep 17, 2012 @ 11:06:40
Hello Holly,
My name is Kirandeep and I go to Penn Wood school in England. I like your great description. I especially like the part when you say… ”He smiles meanly showing every little dagger”. I liked the way when you thought using teeth would be boring so instead you used daggers. That is very good use of words.
Sep 17, 2012 @ 11:13:58
G,day My name is Jamaal. I am in year 6 in Penn Wood School in England. I really love your videos and poems. I like your poem Oscar the Ogre. Itis very funny because it has digusting words . Thanks, Bye and have a nice day.
Sep 18, 2012 @ 05:09:27
Hello 5jdv,
These poams I just read are amazing.You must of put a lot of thought and effort into them. My favourite poam was the Blaze.
From Sam at New Gisborne Primary School Australia
Sep 18, 2012 @ 08:11:43
Thanks for the comment on our pomes it was so fun it was so easy.
Sep 18, 2012 @ 08:24:22
To sam
hello my name is Jack W thank you for leaving a comment on our blog my favourite poem was blaze
from jack w
Sep 18, 2012 @ 05:15:52
Hi my name is Abbey,
And I`m from New Gisborne Primary School in Australia I am in year 6 and I am 12 years old, and I have read most of your poems and that sound like you have out alot of thought into them,
one of my favourites is Zadderyouth by Holly and Oscar the Orge by Rachel but rachels one was funny but gross at the same time. I wish we could do something like that:(
How long did it take to make them?
What was the criteria of them?
someone please answer! 🙂 🙂
Sep 18, 2012 @ 05:17:35
G,day grade 5JDV,
My name is Ashley and I love all the poems that you have made but the one that I thought was best was Oscar the Ogre! It is so funny the way you use disgusting language and all the humor you put into your poem it was just AMAZING well done.
Well done.
From Ashley.:):):):):)
Sep 18, 2012 @ 08:15:56
Hi Ashley
My name is Rachel, thank you I tried my best to make it sound disgusting
What do you do at school at the moment?
Hope you reply
Rachel xx
Sep 21, 2012 @ 00:48:01
Hi Rachel!
I absolutely loved the poem “Oscar the Ogre”. It was vile and crude but mainly hilarious! I thought it waas very funny and, not to be sexist, I thought for sure that it was a boy that had written it but was quite suprised when it said “by Rachel”. (Hopefully you didn’t take that offensively.)
Ruby 🙂 🙂
Sep 21, 2012 @ 00:56:58
Hi Rachel,
right now I am in the softball team and I love it.I hope our Team gets into the Final and win. Also I think there is some competition.
Sep 24, 2012 @ 02:25:17
Hello Ruby it’s Abbey from NGPS, I agree with you 100% I like the poems and I like the one called oscar the orge it was very detailed and well thought out. How long did it take to make them and were the based on magicl creaters?:) please reply
Sep 24, 2012 @ 08:23:26
I hope you get into the final and win the match
Will you tell me the results when you have played?!
Talk to you soon
From Rachel xxxxxxxXXXXXXXXX
Sep 18, 2012 @ 05:19:39
Hello grade 5JDV
My name is Nick
I am from New Gisborne Primary School. I was reading your poems and they are very interesting. I can see that your poems are not riming. Your poems do show a lot of detail and similes. I think that is one bit that I like about your poems. I think you have all done a fantastic job on the poems. Keep up the good work
From
Nick.
Sep 18, 2012 @ 17:40:14
i love our poems well done to all of 5jdv. and i tought that mayas poem was good aswell.
Sep 19, 2012 @ 13:00:07
nice comment
Sep 19, 2012 @ 13:00:50
HI, 5jdv my name is muhammad and i go to a school in England , i loved all your poems ecspecially yours i rate it 5*
Sep 19, 2012 @ 11:10:30
Kacey
We liked ‘eyes are crystal blue’ because it made us realise how beautiful rainbows are.
Even better if you tried out new combinations of words.
6H at Penn Wood
Sep 19, 2012 @ 11:18:26
Hi Holly
We liked this bit best: ‘Eyes, a fiery red’ because it made us fear the dragon.
Instead of ‘sharp as daggers’, you could say: teeth sharpened on souls of soldiers’.
6H at Penn Wood
Sep 19, 2012 @ 12:58:29
Hi your poems are so cool
Sep 19, 2012 @ 12:58:30
Your poems were amazing they are so cool
Sep 19, 2012 @ 12:59:18
Great poems. Well done to all of 5jdv
Sep 19, 2012 @ 13:00:50
hello my name is nimra.I loved your poems i thought they were really good!!
Sep 19, 2012 @ 13:00:52
lovely poems
Sep 19, 2012 @ 13:02:07
i really like your poems!!
Sep 19, 2012 @ 13:03:58
I realy like your poems and there are fantastic .
Sep 19, 2012 @ 13:05:32
Wow! I mean wow! All of your poems were jaw dropping amazing! I liked all of them that all of your poems are my favourite!
Sep 19, 2012 @ 13:46:46
I really like the poem Blaze because it made me feel like i was in it because you used a lot of adjectives.
Sep 19, 2012 @ 13:48:55
I like the Oscar the Ogre poem. It made me laugh a lot. Very good adjectives and similies like “feet so hairy like tarantuala’s skin”. Also very descriptive.
Sep 19, 2012 @ 13:49:26
Hello. I’m Anisah and I have read all the poems and they were really good. I especially liked ‘Blaze.’ I loved the description and the simile you used.
Sep 19, 2012 @ 13:49:31
Hi, my name is Haleemah. I REALLY enjoyed all of the poems and I absolutely loved Kacey’s poem because it was very descriptive.
Sep 19, 2012 @ 13:52:58
Great poems! You described the dragons really well. It made me feel like I was in it.
Oct 03, 2012 @ 15:50:47
Oh wow that must feel amazing to fell that😄
Oct 03, 2012 @ 16:25:16
And three more housepoints! See how easy it is 🙂
Sep 19, 2012 @ 14:05:14
Hi, my name is Ayesha.
I realy like Kasey’s poem because of the way she described the Rainbow.(Rainbows fur as soft as a pillow)
Sep 19, 2012 @ 14:05:28
Hi, my name is Aamir.
I really liked your poems especially Oscar The Ogre. You used amazing adjectives, it felt as if I could see the ogre. I hope you upload loads more poems. Good luck with your poems. Goodbye.
Sep 22, 2012 @ 20:07:04
Hi Holly’
I am a girl which goes to Pennwood Primary school in England. It seems you have put alot of effort into your work. I liked the use of description that you have used
eg. teeth as sharp as daggers. I think you could inprove on were it says ‘his skin scaley black’. Instead of that you could say’his sun burned skin turned black like darkness’.
Yours Sincerely,
Nida
Sep 28, 2012 @ 13:03:42
Hi my name is Ella and I think these poems are really good. 😀
Oct 03, 2012 @ 15:49:17
Hannah great poem loving the name of the unicorn brill her white blanket is so smooth and soft I like it
Nov 20, 2012 @ 19:20:44
Loved doing the poems i really liked Hannah’s and Rachel’s they really put a image in my he’d.
Reply kacey xxx