Our poems

Here are some of the poems that we wrote after our shared writing on Wednesday.

Flame the Dragon

Orange flaming eyes burning the whole city
He stares anxiously at his precious treasure
So nobody steals it.

Teeth are as sharp as a blade
They cut through metal bars
They are as yellow as the sun.

 by     Ayisha

Rader the Eagle

Eyes like fire burning
Stare at the vast, dark, dull mountain
A gold heap of treasure.

Teeth like bright blades
Sharp as swords
They smell like mouldy cheese
Feel like rough rocks.

Skin like hard emeralds lies over
the skin of black
As hot as the sun
with white spots

Claws like sharp daggers
Long nails
Dirty mud.

by Becky

Fire Flinger

Eyes like lava pools
Shine like lanterns in his cave
His treasure gets hot
from him staring at it.

His claws cling carefully
To treasure he’s stolen
His claws are like bird talons
80 times bigger.

His teeth are as big as a rhino’s horn
As sharp as a shark’s tooth
Every hour a new one is born.

by Oliver


His giant orange eyes like molten lava
Glint in the eerie darkness,
Gleaming at the crescent moon.

His black body
is embedded with razor sharp blades
that glow in the darkness.

Shining dull scales
As hard as diamonds
Cover his leathery skin.

His striped tail
As flexible as a gymnast
Wraps round a sturdy tree branch.

His knife-like teeth line his jaw
Around his mouth
Molten breath can melt even the hardest rock.

His legs hold claws the size of a cat
Dripping with raw human blood
Can kill anything.

by Finn

31 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. kacey
    Sep 14, 2012 @ 18:46:19

    WOW! are class blog is amazing ive read some of the poems and the snail
    pictures and livvys tour well done livvy and well done everybody else for doing the snail pictures and the poems


  2. Livi
    Sep 17, 2012 @ 05:21:03

    G, Day
    My name is Livi. I am from New Gisborne Primary School. I am a grade 6 student and I am 11 years old. Your class blog is amazing and I love the poems. I hope we can do them at our school. I am looking forward to talking to you and learning all about you.


  3. Romaan
    Sep 17, 2012 @ 10:31:13

    hi livi i’ve and everyone I’m really that impressed on the poems aswell


  4. Klaudia
    Sep 17, 2012 @ 10:48:32

    Hello my name is Klaudia and I go to school in England.The school is called Penn Wood Primary and Nursery School. I really loved reading your poems.You use such good vocabulary such as simles and aliteration. I am not really good at Literacy but I really like P.E, Maths and Art what subjucts do you like ?


  5. Haider khan
    Sep 17, 2012 @ 10:52:11

    Hello, my name is Haider khan and i go to pennwood primary school I am in grade 6. I like the picture and the peom. Have you earnt any trophies and medals yet. I hope you send a message to us. good day!


  6. Borys
    Sep 17, 2012 @ 10:53:29

    To Ayisha,
    My name is Borys.I am from penn wood.I liked your poem.liked your discripshon and your pesonfication.I am looking forword to reading more of your good poems.


  7. Afsana M
    Sep 17, 2012 @ 10:55:13

    My name is Afsana and I am from Pennwood Primary School.I am in grade/year 6. I love the pictures and poems. Especially the Olympic Torch.

    Did you get a medal? What did you get?

    I hope you go to our Blog.


  8. Natascha Owen
    Sep 17, 2012 @ 10:57:56

    Hi Holly
    My name is Natascha Owen and I come from Penn Wood Primary in Slough! I am in year 6 and very interessted in writing, I am guessing you like it too. Your poem is very good, it is only the first verse does not make much sense but you have used great vocabulary.


  9. sabir
    Sep 17, 2012 @ 11:11:36

    Hi my name is Sabir. I am from Penn Wood Primary and Nursery School in England. I enjoyed reading your poems.You used rhyming words, similes and alliteration. Wow!


    • James Wale
      Sep 18, 2012 @ 08:21:53

      Hello my name is James from Leicester. Thank you for reading my poem i am very thankful for your comment. I enjoyed writing and reading my comment aswell,thanks.


  10. Harrison
    Sep 18, 2012 @ 05:20:49

    Hi everyone my name is Harrison I am 12 and i am from the school new Gisborne Primary School.
    The poems you have written are very good and you have used descriptive language.
    i would like to know when do you start school then finish school and do you have a canteen/ cafeteria.


  11. Salem
    Sep 19, 2012 @ 12:43:33

    Finn , I loved your good combo of words. You could have changed rough to asperous.


  12. Shifa
    Sep 19, 2012 @ 12:58:28

    Hi my name is Shifa . I really liked all your poems they were fantastic. I ecspecially enjoyed Rachels it was very funny.


  13. siraaj
    Sep 19, 2012 @ 13:03:39

    I really enjoyed reading your dragon poems.I’m from mayflower primary school.
    You used really good adjectives and deccribing words!


  14. randeep
    Sep 19, 2012 @ 13:05:52

    i like dragons


  15. ahmed
    Sep 19, 2012 @ 13:08:29

    I really enjoyed your dragon poem it was really good you used really good adjectives


  16. Maria
    Sep 19, 2012 @ 13:47:46

    Hi. I really like your poem. You have used good adjectives like molten lava. Good use of descriptive language.


  17. Bilal
    Sep 19, 2012 @ 13:48:17

    Well done! I really enjoyed reading Blade because it was very descriptive. It made me feel I was there. It had a lot of good similes.


  18. Faiza
    Sep 19, 2012 @ 13:48:58

    Hi my name is Faiza I think your dragon poems are fantastic you all used similes and metaphors.


  19. Safwaan
    Sep 19, 2012 @ 13:49:13

    Hi. I really like your poem. It’s really good with powerful adjectives and verbs. Well done! 🙂


  20. Umar
    Sep 19, 2012 @ 13:50:54

    Hi everyone my name is Umar and I am from Mayflower Primary School.
    I really really like your poems, I especially like the one called Blade because it had very good detail and I could picture it in my mind!


  21. Amani
    Sep 19, 2012 @ 13:54:25

    Hello my name is Amani.
    I really liked your poem because you used really good adjectives and description.


  22. Neha
    Sep 19, 2012 @ 14:07:35

    I really liked Flaming Dragon because of all the adjectives you used. They were so cool. Well Done 🙂


  23. Faizan
    Sep 19, 2012 @ 14:13:05

    I liked the poems because you done good description and I enjoed reading them good job.


  24. lucie
    Sep 28, 2012 @ 13:12:21

    I enjoyed ream from Lucie BHPSding the.


  25. Nikita
    Sep 28, 2012 @ 13:12:34

    Hi I am called Nikita and I am from Biggin Hill Primary School, those poems are really good I really enjoyed them. From Nikita!


  26. lucie
    Sep 28, 2012 @ 13:13:33

    I enjoyed reading your poams from Lucie BHPS.


  27. Nida
    Oct 10, 2012 @ 18:46:57

    HI Holly,
    I loved all the words you used and the way you used them in


  28. Charlie Needham
    Oct 18, 2012 @ 16:57:59

    The best poem out of these is flame the dragon. Really like the first verse


    • devoil
      Oct 19, 2012 @ 06:49:30

      Hello Charlie. It’s lovely to hear from you. Thanks for commenting on the blog. I hope you are enjoying life in year 6.


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